"She was... the only one I had left to care for."
Although I am a person who tends to look towards music with a more optimistic attitude in regards to the overall composure of the song, I have to give you special commendations on the fact that your submission has the FEEL of a true "tragedy" song; not only did it take the instruments and blend them into a more cynical light, but listening to this actually MADE ME FEEL slightly more composed and depressed than before. That may sound like a bad thing, but trust me, that's the kind of emotion you WANT to irk out of people with this kind of song.
The strongest point in your submission is by far the opening sequence, or in specifics, the first minute. This is because the original lead in gives the sense that a tragic event has just happened, and the following tunes begin to culminate into a larger, more catastrophic reaction, bringing this sudden flow of negative emotions into a single, powerful experience.
As for the second portion of this song, I felt a little less affected by the flow overall. While the "wahs" in the background were a nice touch, it felt only slightly off from the feel of the rest of the song. In addition, I feel that for such a sad piece, the point at which it ended was simply too abrupt to be optimally efficient. Thus, if I had to suggest an improvement, it would be to include a sort of "slow down" that suggests the dying down of this furl of emotions, to FULLY leave the listener to consider these new feelings.
That said, this was certainly one of the more enjoyable pieces I have heard, even if it did not earn a perfect score (and thus, a fave) from me. The composition itself is very well thought out, and I can easily see its consequential incorporation into a flash sometime in the future. All we can hope for now is that someone of better Flash talent than me comes across this :3
~sonicmega (responses are <3ed!)